What’s the point Names and titles What’s in the name
· Just about every story has a name in it
· Get all the names correctbe sure to pronounce the name right
· Include a pronunciation guide


EXAMPLES:Josh Giroux [JER-roo]Sesquipedalian [ses"kwi-pi-dA'lE-un, -dAl'yun]Who was that

· Give hint that you’re going to put a name in
· Start with the persons title


Examples :some guy in portage broke the sound barrier in volts wagon (bad)sound barrier was broken by a small child name Andrew Baziel in his volts wagon (GOOD)



Endless Titles

· Break up your sentences
EXAMPLES
there is a high demand of cheese in a small town in Mississippi. All of the farms there have been tainted by a mold called Sesquipedalianbotheis. The people are taking the cheese drought very seriously. Many riots have ensued (GOOD)

The demand of cheese is very high in Mississippi they need more cheese for other places because there is bad stuff happening and it can’t be reversed and the people are going crazy because of the mold that is growing in all of their cheese plants and there is riots all over this small town (bad)



First names First


· Use first names first
· Example: Dr. Huleo just completed the first dolphin to man heart transplant. Huelo said it was a piece of cake (bad)

Dr. Huleo Ricardo Armando Estevez just completed the first dolphin to man heart transplant. Huleo Ricardo Armando said it was a piece of cake (good)

Eliminate the Middleman

· Don’t use initial
· Use full name
·


Example:
W.T SNAKS (Bad)
Jesus Estavez (good)


Identification Please
· Use I titles



Example:
Aaron Pirt (bad)

Cpt.Aaron Pirt (good)


Home Sweet Home
· Use if you cant find tittle

Horay Ornanadez Fernandez won the local piñata hitting contest (bad)
Horay Ornanadez Fernandez of Taco Libra Street won the local piñata hitting contest (good)
Age Gracefully
· Use age if important to the story
· Use if no other means of identification
ExampleChavo Garcia Marcito Bandito Banderez died today in a freak piñata accident
(bad)
Chavo Garcia Marcito Bandito Banderez who is 79 years young died today in a freak piñata accident
(good)


Who Say So
· It’s the source of your information
· Talk like you would to a friend

Example

Rico said we ought to go play piñata today. Henrita said that we played that to much and it’s an awfull stero type of us Mexicans she said she would rather go make tacos. Philipo rubbed his belly and agreed.(good)
Say it with Says
· Don’t have to use synonym of saysExamples
Declared (bad)Said(good)

Repeat Repeat Repeat
· Don’t be afraid to use words twice
Examples

They turned the ball over and over and over
Quotable Quotes
· Use direct quote from the person
· You cant use quotations marks on the radio

Example
Aaron went on saying quote…..Yes you can…..Unquote